Pitch Feedback

I’m working on polishing up marketing material for a novella I plan on using for a reader magnet for my newsletter. I write Sci-Fi that I think is technically YA, but my Timothy is 20-something. I’ve followed Thomas’ pitch creation techniques, and feel I’ve made progress on the protagonist version of the pitch. I’d love to get some feedback from the community!

Pitch:
Isayas is just a kid from the slums with a dream: upgrade his moped to a full-fledged street bike and win glory in the underground racing scene. All he needs is black-market tech and enough wins to get by. But a reckless act of loyalty to a street racing legend throws Isayas headfirst into a hidden world far more dangerous and complex than the streets he races on. Caught between deadly secrets, ancient technology, and a looming threat to his city, Isayas’ courage could be the only thing standing between his city and total annihilation.