I need feedback on my 1st audiobook 5.05 minutes.

One of my newsletter readers asked me to give making audiobooks a try. This is my best effort at this time. I need your feedback to make my next endeavor more successful. Here’s the audiobook video on my blog. https://svfarnsworthauthor.com/red-parade-ashlyn-of-cairn-origin-story-by-s-v-farnsworth-author-narrated-short-story-audiobook-video/ It’s only 5.05 minutes in length because it’s a short story.