Day #7 - Better Copy HW by Michael Fedor

Take one of your old newsletter emails and rewrite it. Show us the before and after.

Original:

Dear Reader,

I was at my computer writing this week when the U.S. Senate began a debate on the impeachment of a cabinet secretary. The President Pro Temp refused to decide a point of order and instead put the question to the Senate.

I got chills.

Anyone who finished reading The Senate Deception would know why. It is a pivotal moment in the book on whether or not filibuster reform has a chance.

I got on X and Insta and a few others and said, "hey if you're watching this right now, you're a political nerd just like me and my readers! We have a seat saved for you in our growing community! Come join us!"

Setbacks Become Opportunities

You have not heard from me in a little while. I was licking my wounds from our failed Kickstarter for Bull Moose Book 1 🫎. While we reached over 65% funding, it was not the 100% we needed to fully fund the editing and off-set printing for a May release.

My entrepreneurial side kicked in. I went back to the drawing board with my fellow writing community and committed to a stronger launch team and a more creative solution to get the final copy editing done. The release date has been pushed back as a consequence, but have no fear. You'll be reading about Jackson and Catherine Piper, Ron Bender, Valerie Lawrence, Diesel Browning, Russell Warner, Ziggy, and the new Bull Moose Party before Flag Day 🇺🇸.

If you are dying for a hard political science fiction thriller (we're going to start calling our genre Poli-Fi, friends) BEFORE June, and you have not yet read The Senate Deception, what are you waiting for?

It has a topical subject - the U.S. Senate and filibuster reform in the age of a divided country.

It has fantastic characters you won't forget and all of them appear in some form in What It Takes to Kill a Bull Moose.

The Senate Deception is a book .5 - a prequel if you will - to Bull Moose Book #1!

It is hard political fiction because it's based on how the Senate and U.S. politics actually function. Soft political fiction takes a lot of liberties on how the systems actually work in order to move the story along. You won't find that in my books.

It is hard science fiction because current and anticipated technological advancements play a role in the story - there is a great AI character named Ziggy that you'll love.

Over 1,100 readers have downloaded or purchased the book since January 12 this year and the reviews have been incredible! If you're an email subscriber (hint, you are because you're reading this), you can download a free copy right now here.

Things I Love This Month

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Here's this week's quote of inspiration:

"Success is not final, failure is not fatal; it is the courage to continue that counts."

-Winston Churchill

I needed that one recently. Hope you found it as inspirational as I did.

Back to the future and my keyboard...

Michael

New:

Dear Reader,

I got chills.

If you finished reading The Senate Deception would know why. It is a pivotal moment in the book on whether or not filibuster reform has a chance.

I got on X and Insta and a few others and posted, "hey if you're watching this right now, you're a political junkie just like me and my readers! We have a seat saved for you in our growing community! Come join us!"

This reminds me if you know someone who was tuning in like you, please feel free to forward this email to them and let them know there is a writer out there writing for them.

If you are dying for a hard political thriller / science fiction mystery BEFORE my next release in June, and you have not yet read The Senate Deception, what are you waiting for?

The fast-moving novella is set in the U.S. Senate in 2039 on the cusp of historic filibuster reform in the age of a more divided country, but there is a dark secret behind the reforms.

The Senate Deception has fantastic characters and is a book .5 - a prequel if you will - What It Takes to Kill a Bull Moose, which is set for release June 11.

You will be captivated by the realistic portrayal of how the Senate and U.S. politics actually function. Some political fiction takes a lot of liberties on how the systems actually work in order to move the story along. You won't find that in my books.

There is a spicy hint of hard science fiction in my writing because current and anticipated technological advancements play a role in the story - there is a fascinating sentient AI character named Ziggy who helps solve the book’s main mystery. I know when you read her, you’ll just fall in love with her wit, knowledge, and enthusiasm.

Over 1,100 readers have downloaded or purchased the book since January 12 this year when it released, and the reviews have been incredible! If you're an email subscriber (hint, you are because you're reading this), you can download a free copy right now here.

Things I Love This Month

Quality Thriller Book Giveaway! - 50 Wonderful Reads for FREE

April Thriller Books for Free! - 57 Incredible FREE Books

Inspiring Heroes, Conspiring Villians - FREE Political Thrillers!

From the Shadows - Check out 28 FREE chilling and suspenseful reads

Slow Burn - Character Driven Thrillers - 29 Books Recommended for Purchase

Finally, let me leave you with this week's quote of inspiration:

"Success is not final, failure is not fatal; it is the courage to continue that counts."

-Winston Churchill

Back to the future and my keyboard...

Michael

Rewrite or edit the back cover copy for one of the five books you know well. What did you change?

11/22/63 by Stephen King

Original:

Dallas, 11/22/63: Three shots ring out. President John F. Kennedy is dead.

Life can turn on a dime—or stumble into the extraordinary, as it does for Jake Epping, a high school English teacher in a Maine town. While grading essays by his GED students, Jake reads a gruesome, enthralling piece penned by janitor Harry Dunning: fifty years ago, Harry somehow survived his father’s sledgehammer slaughter of his entire family. Jake is blown away…but an even more bizarre secret comes to light when Jake’s friend Al, owner of the local diner, enlists Jake to take over the mission that has become his obsession—to prevent the Kennedy assassination. How? By stepping through a portal in the diner’s storeroom, and into the era of Ike and Elvis, of big American cars, sock hops, and cigarette smoke…Finding himself in warmhearted Jodie, Texas, Jake begins a new life. But all turns in the road lead to a troubled loner named Lee Harvey Oswald. The course of history is about to be rewritten…and become heart-stoppingly suspenseful.

New:

If you had the power to change the course of history – to right a wrong – would you? High school English teacher Jake Epping faces this very question when Al, his longtime friend and diner owner in the quiet Maine town, reveals to him a spectacular secret. Al’s diner storeroom is a portal to 1958. For years, Al has been traveling back in time to buy fresh beef for his remarkable burgers but soon found a greater power of the portal. Al has been attempting to stop the assassination of President John F. Kennedy. Now dying of cancer, Al insists Jake use the portal to take up the impossible mission. Jake reluctantly takes up the charge only to discover the past has a mind of its own, fighting actively against his efforts to change it. Settling down in Jodie, Texas to prepare for his five-year mission to change the outcome of 11/22/1963, Jake discovers the past may have more to offer him than a front-row seat to horrific history, challenging him to make a heart-breaking choice.

Write or rewrite your back cover copy using what you’ve learned.

What does it take to rig a presidential election?

Former Senator Jackson Piper stands at the podium, about to accept the Bull Moose Party nomination for President of the United States. His running mate, the electrifying female governor of Texas, spoke about the price of freedom the night before in the same stadium. Now it is vibrating with the thunderous applause. Screams and cheers of 85,000 citizens create a deafening hum. They are eager to renew their faith in democracy – to feel hopeful again. Men and women eager to defy conventions and rewrite the political rulebook in America.

Experience a presidential election thrill ride set in 2044. You will fall in love with the Bull Moose leaders fighting to stop controversial U.S. President Russell Warner and his plans to rig his reelection. Cheer for the cool calculation of strategist Ron Bender and his sentient A.I. assistant Ziggy. Root for evangelist-turned-senator Eileen Frazier or the larger-than-life Speaker of the House Sylvester Billings of Louisiana.

When a mysterious death rocks the presidential contest, challenge turns to chaos. Is there a conspiracy at play or is it the Curse of Tippecanoe?

To win, the victor must survive kidnappings, revenge, spies, and attempted assassination in the most perilous presidential campaign in American history.

But will winning the most votes and surviving long enough to take the oath of office be enough to change the powerful forces of corruption?

Find out in What It Takes to Kill a Bull Moose by Michael Fedor.

Write out five to ten possible headlines for your website.

1 Experience Politics More Thrilling Than the Real Thing

2 Are You Looking for Escape to an Inspiring World of Politics?

3 If You are Searching for Terrifyingly Plausible Political Thrillers, Look No Further

4 From President Bartlett to Piper – Fictional Presidents You Can Get Excited About

5 Five Ways the Bull Moose Book Series will Inspire Your Patriotic Side

6 Don’t Feel Left Out by Real World Politics – Escape to the Bull Moose Universe

7 What if Political Thrillers and Science Fiction Had a Party and You Were Invited?

8 Turn Back: Heart-Pumping Political Suspense Found Here

9 America’s Discord Could be Solved by a Bull Moose; Read More

10 Are You Missing Out on a New Take on Political Thrillers?

Take your existing copy on one to two of your website pages and rewrite them. What did you change? What did you discover?

I discovered my copy needs to be a lot more reader-focused and more explicit about what I am offering to a site visitor in terms of genre, content, tone, and experience.