Session #7 Homework - Claudia LeBoeuf

Here is my back cover copy. I included a version 2 of the final sentence that has a question instead of a statement. I'd like any critiques you might have, but I would really like to know which version you think is better, ending with the statement or with the question.

Version 1: Russ Atkins, an ex-con space pilot with a gift for sensing mind intrusion, hungers for a fresh start on life. Restoring a telepathic child to her clan in defiance of the law is not what he has in mind.

The Union of Planets, governed from twenty-third century Earth, nurtures a deep-seated loathing toward its former thought-shifting overlords, the Ilanians. Aside from an enslaved group of Ilanians, many of whom are used as special agents to hunt their own kind, all telepaths and humans who help them face execution.

With a death penalty hanging over his head, Russ plunges into a criminal underworld to evade capture. When a powerful Union agent from his past threatens his young friend’s clan, Russ must overcome his own prejudices to defend them.

Version 2: But when a powerful Union agent from his past threatens his young friend’s clan, will Russ overcome his own prejudices to defend them?