Blurb feedback for a cozy fairytale retelling? Human or AI blurb?
The last blurb test I did was for a non-fiction, and Thomas’s blurb generator’s back cover copy won hands down. But for this fairytale retelling, my sister prefers my blurb. Now, I’m confused, and I would love more feedback!
Option 1 is just a blurb. Option 2 is blurb plus the rest of the Amazon page description. Which do you prefer? (Image for visual interest, and because I like it, even though I’ll likely get the color of the gemstones in the crown changed). Thanks so much!
Option 1
A forbidden bookshop. A forbidden romance. Tea cups and treason.
Prince Marmaduke of Perrahold is a handsome bald man but is convinced he needs a spell for hair to be a better spy. The trouble is the only place to get the spell is the Potions and Pages Bookshop and Spellery in Litvania, a kingdom known for trying to grab other lands—and royals—however it can.
Lady Lolly of Litvania would do anything to keep her secret correspondent in Parrahold safe from the machinations of Litvania’s princess, even risk the Potions and Pages Bookshop for a book on how to betray her princess and kingdom.
When the two literally run into each other among the bookshelves, trouble ensues, and it only gets worse when they find their spells. It will take more than a good cup of tea to save them both from their bespelled fates and Litvania’s plots.
Humor, spells gone awry, a matchmaking bookshop cat, no-spice swoony romance, and a dash of Cinderella magic, You’ve Got Mail mistaken identities, and The Shaggy Dog fun in a no-spice cozy fantasy of spying gone awry.
Option 2
She knows his handwriting. She has no idea who he is.
Lolly Cendrillon has a secret. For ten years, she’s written to Prince Marmaduke of Parrahold under the guise of the Lady of Litvania, quietly refuting the cruel and deceptive letters of her princess and guarding his kingdom from afar. When the prince arrives in Litvania for a royal wedding she begged him not to attend, Lolly knows two things with equal certainty: the treacherous trade agreement her king has prepared will start a war, and she cannot let Marmaduke sign it. She’ll even risk a forbidden enchanted bookshop, one run by a meddlesome cat, for the one book that can save his kingdom. What she does not know is that the broad-shouldered, bald-headed stranger who steals that spell book is him.
One spy prince. One lady's maid. One kingdom on the line.
With less than a fortnight before the final ball, when the trade agreement must be signed, Lolly must navigate a cruel princess, spells gone awry, and her own dangerously divided heart. The ink-and-paper prince she has adored for years is everything she ever dreamed. The man she is coming to know as Jack is something else entirely: real, maddening, and far too easy to love. Both of them are hiding, and both of them are running out of time.
When the ink dries, only courage remains.
If Lolly cannot expose the invisible ink concealing the agreement's dangerous terms before the stroke of midnight, two kingdoms will fall. And if she cannot find the courage to risk her carefully guarded heart, she will lose the one thing neither a spell book nor a fairy godmother can replace.
The Lady’s Maid and the Spy Prince is a delightfully witty, swoon-worthy fairytale for readers who love clever heroines, noble heroes, romantic slow-burns, and happily-ever-afters that are hard-won and very much deserved.
This is “Cinderella” and You've Got Mail mashup retelling features:
A witty, warm Cinderella heroine who scrubs floors in ballgowns and wields hatpins against ruffians
A spy prince who “steals” spell books, proves “bald is beautiful,” and winks far too charmingly
A meddling bookshop cat in an immaculate navy dinner jacket just as meddling as the enchanters’ bookshop he runs
Invisible ink, a daring and hilarious Pumpkin Spice Plan, and one perfect pair of glass slippers
A tender slow-burn romance with no spice and a deeply satisfying happily-ever-after
Part of the Curse Keeper, Curse Breaker Fairytale series. Stands fully alone.
Perfect for fans of clean fairytale retellings, cozy romantasy, and stories where the hero and heroine save the kingdom together.
